Assignment # 11(b)

Could this paragraph be divided into at least two smaller paragraphs? Leave a comment to address this question and explain your position.

"A year after the bomb was dropped, Miss Sasaki was a cripple; Mrs. Nakamura was destitute; Father Kleinsorge was back in the hospital; Dr. Sasaki was not capable of the work he once could do; Dr. Fuji had lost the thirty-room hospital it took him many years to acquire, and had no prospects of rebuilding it; Mr. Tanimoto’s church had been ruined and he no longer had his exceptional vitality. The lives of these six people, who were among the luckiest in Hiroshima, would never be the same. What they though of their experiences and of the use of the atomic bomb was, of course, not unanimous. One feeling they did seem to share, however, was a curious kind of elated community spirit, something like that of the Londoners after their blitz-a pride in the way they and their fellow-survivors had stood up to a dreadful ordeal. Just before the anniversary, Mr. Tanimoto wrote in a letter to an American some words which expressed this feeling: “What a heartbreaking scene this was the first night! About midnight I landed on the riverbank. So many injured people lied on the ground that I made my way by striding over them. Repeating ‘Excuse me,’ I forwarded and carried a tub of water with me and gave a cup of water to each one of them. They raised their upper bodies slowly and accepted a cup of water with a bow and drunk quietly and; spilling any remnant, gave back a cup with hearty expression of their thankfulness, and said, ‘I couldn’t help my sister, who was buried under the house, because I had to take care of my mother who got a deep wound on her eye and our house soon set fire and we hardly escaped. Look, I lost my home, my family, and at last my-self bitterly injured. But now I have gotted my mind to dedicate what I have and to complete the war for our country’s sake.’ Thus they pledged to me, even women and children did the same. Being entirely tired I lied down on the ground among them, but couldn’t sleep at all. Next morning I found many men and women dead, whom I gave water last night. But, to my great surprise, I never heard any one cried in disorder, even though they suffered in great agony. They died in silence, with no grudge, setting their teeth to bear it. All for the country!" (Hiroshima, p.87-88)

Assignment #11(a)

Could this paragraph be divided into at least two smaller paragraphs? Leave a comment to address this question and explain your position.

“At the Red Cross Hospital, Miss Sasaki was put under the care of Dr. Sasaki. Now, a month after the explosion, something like order had been reestablished in the hospital; which is to say that the patients who still lay in the corridors at least had mats to sleep on and that the supply of medicines, which had given out in the first few days, had been replaced, though inadequately, by contributions from other cities. Dr. Sasaki, who had had one seventeen-hour sleep at his home on the third night, had ever since then rested only about six hours a night, on a mat at the hospital; he had lost twenty pounds from his very small body; he still wore the borrowed glasses.” (Hiroshima, p.70)

Assignment #10(c) - Help

8. Consider this passage from Brian’s Hunt:

He has the bow, a laminate straight, almost a longbow, that pulled forty-five pounds at twenty-six inches’ draw.

In this case, what is “draw,” and does “pounds” refer to here?

Original answer:
In this case, “draw” is the arrow and “pounds” refers to the weight of the longbow.

“All assistance that contributes to revising this answer is greatly appreciated.”

Assighment #10(b)

11. How does Brian catch fish in Brian’s Hunt? Could you catch fish that way or could you not? Explain.

Original answer:
Brian attracts the fish by using guts and when the fish gather around them, he use his bag to catch them. I could catch fish that way because I think it is a good and easy way to catch more fishes.

Revision:
Brian catches fish by using his bow in Brian's Hunt. He waited patiently and when he saw a fish was around the lily pad, he aimed his bow on the bottom of the fish to avoid refraction and he was done with it. I could catch fish that way because I studied science before and knew that water could create refraction. With this knowledge, I think the way Brian’s catch fish is a easy way.

Assignment #10(a)

3. Consider this passage from Brian’s Hunt:

A coyote, perhaps, brush wolf as they called them up north, or maybe a timber wolf, two wolves, one begging from the other.

What is the sentence type here, and why?

Original answer:
The sentence type is simple because it has only one independent clause. The pronoun “they” functions as the subject and “called” functions as the verb.

Revision:
The sentence type is fragment complex because it has no independent clause and one dependent clause. The dependent clause is “as they called them up north”. The pronoun “they” functions as the subject and “called” functions as the verb. The subordinator is “as.”

Assignment 9(b)

"The Japanese wartime diet had not sustained him, and he felt the strain of being a foreigner in an increasingly xenophobic Japan; even a German, since the defeat of the Fatherland, was unpopular." (Hiroshima, p. 16)

I don't understand what is the Japanese wartime diet.

Assignment 9(a)

"Dr.Machii said, "It must have been a Molotoffano hanakago"-a Molotov flower basket, the delicate Japanese name for the "bread basket," or self-scattering cluster of bombs." (Hiroshima, p.32)

I don't understand the meaning of the Japanese word, "Molotoffano hanakago" and what actually is the bom.

Assignment #8(b)

"He took a clearing with a slight angle and stumbled around in the dark to find wood and it was truly late by the time he was ready to get water on to boil and cut pieces of meat to make a stew." (p.64)

Assignment #8(a)

"And I have a friend whose nephew was in a scout camp in Wisconsin and a bear pulled him out of his tent at night and tried to carry him off and eat him and only let go when dozens of scouts attaked the bear with rocks and sticks and forced it to drop the boy, who had to get hundreds of stitches and has not fully recovered the use of his arm." (p.103)

Assignment # 5

Complex Sentence
"In this paragraph, the author describes how does he is caught by the sea for the first time." (http://yjpapaya.blogspot.com/)

Compound Sentence
"The two independent clauses have a subject and a verb within the sentence and it joined together with a coordinator."(http://www.tinhsekhongphai.blogspot.com/)

Compound-Complex Sentence
"We want to see what it is like out there so we can learn just like the author does."(http://minh-khieu.blogspot.com/)

Simple Sentence
"The author had a lot of determination to complete his goals and succeed." (http://don4tell4.blogspot.com/)